Some people feel that equality between the genders has already been achieved while others feel there is considerable progress to be made. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

According to some
people
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men
and
women
both are considered equal in
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society while others believe that, still there is a need
of
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progression to attain
this
equality. I completely agree with those who claim that efforts are still required to completely demolish
this
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gender based
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inequality. Some people claim that in
this
modernised world, there is no more disparity regarding
the
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gender
.
This
is because nowadays,
women
have made a lot of progress in all the fields
such
as army, aerospace and certain sports
such
as boxing which were predominated by
men
in the past years.
Moreover
, due to
higher
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literacy
rate
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there is no
gender
discrimination . To illustrate, in a survey in France, it was found that presently, there are more
women
pilots as compared to
men
which
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considered as completely a male
dominant
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profession in the back days.
Therefore
, raised education levels have made it possible to
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achieve
achive
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achieve
this
equality in the
gender
.
On the other hand
, many believe that still a lot of
progression
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is required pertaining to
this
aspect of
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society. To elaborate, in many nations, people still think that few tasks are only made for
women
such
as household chores.
In addition
to
this
, in many countries
still
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there is a disparity between a boy and a girl when they are born.
For instance
, in many parts of India,
birth
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of a boy is considered much better and
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as compared to a girl child. Henceforth,
spread
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of awareness is still required in
this
matter to diminish
this
discripancy
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discrepancy
forever. To
conculde
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conclude
, there is no doubt that
presently
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in most
of
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the nations
women
are considered equally as
men
.
However
, I believe that in most
of
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the developing countries
this
disparity is prevalent and
lot
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of efforts are required to mitigate
this
issue for the betterment of society as well as
country
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the country
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.
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