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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #choices
There is no doubt that in
this
 contemporary era many
choices
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 to be done . It is argued
between
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 folks that in the current days there are many
choices
 to pick from . I personally completely agree with the statement. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss why I entirely agree.
To begin
, many believe that education developed more
choices
 for
students
 to pick from.
Firstly
,
students
 are given more majors than a
couple
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 decades ago. Take for
an
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example, the major of data security was recently added a few years ago .
Thus
, providing more future
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options
 for
students
.
Secondly
, more universities are and being
bulit
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built
.
Hence
,
students
 can pick the university
that is
 closer to them and can fulfil
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 requirements of it.
Finally
, the number of personal tutors has significantly increased. To illustrate, youth who have a hard time going through their studies can contact
an
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 tutor with affordable
leasons
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lessons
 to help them with their studies .
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, it can be seen that many
choices
 for education
has
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 been created to satisfy young individuals. On the same hand, restaurants develop their menu in
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recent years to have more selections. The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that many
choices
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 been put
in
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on
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 the menu to satisfy picky eaters .
For instance
, providing vegetarian
options
 for those who do not eat meat .
Thus
, more demand
on
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 restaurants with a variety of alternatives to meet everybody's
preference
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. It is clear that
a
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variety
options
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 are added
in
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to
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 menus to live up
for
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to
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individuals
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individuals'
individual's
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 strict diets. To conclude, providing a variety of
choices
 and selections has been a popular trend among education facilities and restaurants .
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, I totally agree that nowadays more
options
 are available to fit
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peoples
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 demands.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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