Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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on the poor countries. Some developed

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help in different forms rather than giving financial support. In my point of

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not only economic support.

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utilise the wealth provided by the richer nation but still one

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major problems is

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financial help to develop their society,

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from food scarcity.

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of issues including

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and investing in poor

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employment

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conditions and it starts to rise and changed the GDP to a greater height. To sum up, from the

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points only

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of richer

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will not solve all the major problems of poor

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developed countries should aid all methods of help to poor

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rather than financial help.

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Topic Vocabulary:

poverty alleviation
economic inequality
developing nations
foreign aid
sustainable growth
technical assistance
expertise
infrastructure
education
fair trade
trade barriers
sustainable development
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