Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In

this

fast-paced world, every developed

nations

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are focusing on their growth but not only

developing

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on developing

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their country, they

also

took

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a

view

on the poor countries. Some developed

nations

aid some money to the poor

nations

to grow but

this

method doesn't make the citizens of poor

nations

to relieve

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from

poverty

and it still continues. There's a

second

thought that rich countries should provide

the

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help in different forms rather than giving financial support. In my point of

view

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I believe that wealthier

nation

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nations

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should aid

all

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in all

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forms of

helps

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help

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not only economic support.

To begin

with, poor

nations

utilise the wealth provided by the richer nation but still one

the

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of the

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major problems is

poverty

and it continues.

Moreover

, poor

nations

utilised

the

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financial help to develop their society,

environment

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and environment

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and make people

relieve

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from food scarcity.

However

, by doing

this

the major issue will not be solved and

its

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continuing. To illustrate, in a recent survey it was shown that

poverty

is still leading in poor

nations

eventhough

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even though

finacial

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financial

aids

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are

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provided by wealthier

nations

and

this

is due to their improper

vision

.

On the other hand

, richer

nations

need to help the poor

nations

in making a

long term

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vision

to solve all

type

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types

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of issues including

poverty

.

Furthermore

,

by

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making

a

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accurate

vision

and investing in poor

nations

increase the

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employment

employement

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employment

opportunities.

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,

increase

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in

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employment

employement

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employment

opportunities solve all the major problems of the citizens of poor

nations

and it will lead the economic conditions of the poor

nations

to grow.

For instance

, China invested in

Pakistan

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Pakistan's

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employment

employement

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employment

conditions and it starts to rise and changed the GDP to a greater height. To sum up, from the

view

of

above

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points only

wealth

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the wealth

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of richer

nations

will not solve all the major problems of poor

nations

.Poor

nations

need

a

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vision

support too. In my

view

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developed countries should aid all methods of help to poor

nations

rather than financial help.