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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. You should write at least 250 words.

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There is no doubt that the health of
children
 is very crucial
in
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at
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their
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 young age. The illness during young days could be avoided by proper
vaccination
.
This
 essay will discuss the importance of vaccines in
children
 and
awareness
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 required in
parents
 to boost immunity against diseases. The immunity system of
children
 is very weak during childhood and the body can not give resistance to the external viruses or bacteria if exposed. Because of
this
,
children
 catch deadly diseases in no time if not vaccinated.
For instance
, the world is free from Polio and several other diseases due to
vaccination
 which resulted from
hard
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 work of our scientists and medical experts. The sense of insecurity in
parents
 for their loved ones is increasing due to the single-child concept in society.
Hence
,
parents
 are not willing to take any risk on their
children
 by injecting vaccines made of unknown chemicals. The government health authority should launch various campaigns to spread scientific truth and build enough confidence in
people
 against
vaccination
 . The recent example of lack of confidence among
people
 towards the Covid-19 vaccine. The lack of
vaccination
 and poor immunity system, thousands of
people
 died across the world which could have definitely been avoided. Many governments forced and legalized the
vaccination
 requirement to protect
people
 against the deadly virus. In conclusion, I strongly believe that all
parents
 shall understand the importance of the health of their
children
 and ensure
vaccination
.
Moreover
, the government shall establish trust in
parents
 for newly developed
vaccination
 and encourage immunisation in
children
.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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