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Write a 150 word letter to a family who are looking for some one to live with them and take care of six year old.

#word #care #six #year
My name is Raju Hassan, I am a student of Weston University, and I live in Australia for
studies
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. Recently, an advertisement caught my interest in the "People To Hire" section of the "Daily Magazine" that you're searching for someone who can look after your
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six-year-old
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six-year old
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 son. I was looking for a job in which I can earn a decent wage, as well as a place to live nearby my university, which would be an additional benefit to cut my monthly expenses of paying rent for a room, here at my university hostel. I would
also
 like you to know, that I hold prior experience of
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babysitting
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baby sitting
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, as I am a very humble and friendly person, due to
this
 nature I was quite a fan among the children, at my previous employment.
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, I am very polite in getting along with the kids, which makes our relationship mutual. In my free time, I like to read books. Please do contact me on my cell phone number
that
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 is 007785614-5, I would be more than happy to answer your queries
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 if any. I will be looking forward to hearing from you. Sincerely, Raju
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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