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Some commentators feel that grandparents should live together with their children and grandchildren, while others say that elderly people should be encourage to live independently. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion.

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Some interpreters hold
this
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 view that elderly
people
 should be independent and live
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by
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my
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own
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their own
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, others put forward the argument that it is better for old
people
 to live with their family members. There are some reasons for both groups which are mentioned below. On the one hand, having lived with
the
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their
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 loved ones, grandparents could have
wellbeing
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well-being
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 and
happy
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a happy
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 mood. Simply put, old
people
similar
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and similar
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other
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 creatures need love and affection to be in a good mood. So being close to grandchildren makes them cheerful which leads to mental and physical health and security. Take your grandparents as an example; the more you talk and tell
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joke
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 with them, the more they are healthy and glad. Scientists discovered that the elderly who live together with their
children
 and grandchildren do not suffer from dementia as much as those who live alone.
Therefore
, if we tend to have happy and
wellbeing
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 seniors, living with
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each other
eachother
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each other
 in one place is inevitable.
On the other hand
, living with family members might have some drawbacks for both grandparents and their loved ones.
That is
 to say, these elderly
people
 are not
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 due to being helped and supported by others with their personal affairs. A good illustration of
this
 is
at
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on
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 occasions on which they need to go to the drugstore to get their necessary medicine; on these
opportunities
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 they are able to meet other peers and make friends
to
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apply
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improve their
relationship
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relationships
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.
In addition
, sometimes their
children
 are busy at work and have to work around the clock, so
children
 are highly unlikely to be able to take care of their old parents.
As a result
,
this
 matter is a huge burden for family members as well. In conclusion, in my point of view,
although
 living with your own kids and grandchildren may be almost the best way of living, owing to a couple of downsides it can not be a suitable approach for both parents and
children
.
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