The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The maps give information about a plan to develop an industrial site in Norbinton into some refreshment in the
next
period.
Overall
, the idea is to redevelop into an urban
area
with more housing and complementary facilities. Currently, the
area
is dominated by factories along the road, with two shapes of the road. The first one is a roundabout in the middle of the map with three plants around them. After that, there is a straight road on the east side with five plants located along the street. A river separates the factory site and farmland with no bridge connection. Meanwhile, one of the redevelopment plans is to change all the manufacturers into houses. There are
also
two additional roads and a new circular street
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the south of the map.
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, the space of the farmland will decrease because of the development of
new
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house
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area
and a new bridge to connect the
center
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of the
area
to the north side of the river.
Lastly
, the master plan will add essential facilities
such
as a school for education, a medical
center
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, a playground to entertain people, and shops.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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