The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
The maps give information about a plan to develop an industrial site in Norbinton into some refreshment in the
next
period. Linking Words
Overall
, the idea is to redevelop into an urban Linking Words
area
with more housing and complementary facilities.
Currently, the Use synonyms
area
is dominated by factories along the road, with two shapes of the road. The first one is a roundabout in the middle of the map with three plants around them. After that, there is a straight road on the east side with five plants located along the street. A river separates the factory site and farmland with no bridge connection.
Meanwhile, one of the redevelopment plans is to change all the manufacturers into houses. There are Use synonyms
also
two additional roads and a new circular street Linking Words
in
the south of the map. Change preposition
on
Next
, the space of the farmland will decrease because of the development of Linking Words
new
Correct article usage
a new
house
Replace the word
housing
area
and a new bridge to connect the Use synonyms
center
of the Change the spelling
centre
area
to the north side of the river. Use synonyms
Lastly
, the master plan will add essential facilities Linking Words
such
as a school for education, a medical Linking Words
center
, a playground to entertain people, and shops.Change the spelling
centre
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