The average standard of people health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowlegde or experience.
In the contemporary epoch,there is irrefutable debate about the state of
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people's
health
.The mean level of Use synonyms
folks
well-being is probably to be beneath in the years to come than it is today.I firmly coincide Change noun form
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withstand the stated notion because of unhealthy eating habits, challenging economy and pollution.Change preposition
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several
years to come,the well-being of people will be deteriorating and the pivotal element is pollution due to plenty of carbon Change preposition
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emission
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emissions
environment
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use
of chemicals during farming despite the nations coming up with Correct article usage
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a policy
policy
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that is
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unhealthy
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eating habits are very common in Correct your spelling
unhealthy
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is
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economy Correct article usage
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as a result
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diseases
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everyday
so it will continue affecting the Replace the word
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fittness
of people in the time ahead.
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fitness
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health
of people is still below average despite technology evolving to detect Use synonyms
diseases
early and initiate treatment in advance so that the harm can be terminated.Use synonyms
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environment
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regulation
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regulations
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research done by Kenyatta University depicts that the rate of cancer has drastically increased.Correct article usage
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Therefore
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present
health
is Use synonyms
worring
despite machinery to detect Correct your spelling
worrying
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diseases
early.
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i
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in spite
inspite
technology advancement,the Correct your spelling
in spite
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the
society is at risk because of Correct article usage
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uncontrolled
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the uncontrolled
environment
,bad eating habits and tough economic times Use synonyms
as a result
, the future Linking Words
well being
of the community will be underneath.Add a hyphen
well-being
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