It has been observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects at university. What do you think are the causes of the problem? What are the effects on society

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There are many reasons for the lack of interest in
science
subjects. The
first
reason is that in most schools the sciences that are taught, have outdated and irrelevant curricula. Most of the education is theoretical and leaves little room for enjoyment. On top of that, most primary school teachers are themselves not very interested in
science
, and so are not good teachers, who can stimulate children's interest in
science
. So, the base of students in
science
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stream is weak, and
therefore
they do not opt for
science
in higher classes. Learning
science
often requires hard work and considerable intellectual effort, which is not present in the contemporary youth culture. What is more, students who choose to study
science
are perceived as boring and somewhat crazy
.
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Furthermore
, a white-coated, hardworking and not very
well paid
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scientist in a laboratory, is not a role model for many of today's young
people
. Football players, film stars and pop artists receive global publicity and earn fortunes. The lives of journalists and others working in the media seem interesting and challenging. Young
people
also
know that lawyers
,
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and some of those trading in the financial markets earn ten or a hundred times more money than the physicist in the laboratory. The social climate, especially in developed countries, is not one,
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it is easy to convince young
people
that they should concentrate on learning
science
at school or beyond. A shortage of scientists and technologists can be very detrimental
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societies
. Our
societies
are dominated by ideas and products from
science
and technology, and the influence of
science
and technology on our lives will continue to increase in the years to come. Scientific and technological knowledge and skills are crucial for most of our actions and decisions, as workers,
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voters,
as
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consumers, etc. In short, modern
societies
need
people
with scientific and technological qualifications at the highest level. If there will be
less
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of these scientists,
then
societies
will stagnate and
further
progress will stop altogether. To sum up, there are many reasons for students not taking up
science
subjects at university and
this
phenomenon shall definitely be detrimental
for
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society.
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