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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
There is an increase among
the
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people
to go
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 to different countries where their native
language
 seems to be alien to them. Some suggest that
this
 is causing some social problems. I completely disagree with
this
 notion as it brings the world closer than creating issues. Humans have always
traveled
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 to a distant land where there are different languages but the
travelers
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 and migrants have most of the time learned the native languages and took interest in the cultures of
others
.
For instance
, in Germany where there are a huge number of settlers from different countries, who not just settled
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 but even learn German to reduce the
language
 barrier to communicate with locals and they live in harmony.
Therefore
, not knowing a
language
 is not an issue for most as
people
 learn new languages if they are required to do so. It has often
seen
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 that especially immigrants in western countries are very helpful towards
others
, they often extend a helping hand to
others
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 their own hardship when they needed and someone helped them,
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 a better society. Canada is the best example of
such
 an incident, when a maple
syrup producing
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 family had a setback in their business due to COVID as their huge export order was
canceled
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 citizens from Canada came forward to place orders so that the maple syrup producers could survive through COVID. So, living in a country with a different
language
 make
people
 more empathetic toward
others
. To conclude, living in a place with
different
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language
 does not create problems
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whether
wheather
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whether
 in society or in practical life as
people
 learn the
language
 of the land they are living
and
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 these
people
 are generally more considerate of
others
 which ultimately
help
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 society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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