More and more people are seriously overweight. Some people suggest the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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has polarized public opinion . Few folks opine that the government should be increasing the price of
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overweight serves the interest of it is
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presence in an advantageous way , while other cliques of men divulge that it is contemptible by society or people and only brings drawbacks with it .
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of
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to throw light on the pros and the cons of
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income by
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, the ministry will get considerable money compared
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a huge number of money which is 500,000 R.O each month because they
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did it . Another positive outlook is
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.
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the price in all
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. Actually , they are
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buying
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eating
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fast
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rather than healthy
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food
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dinner every
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from outside that why she had overweight .
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, she can not stays one day without it , so it is a really good idea to stop these kinds of
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humans .
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that the thorns of
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health ,
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without it . Actually , some of the persons
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good income ,
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they can not buy enough goods . To be honest , these days became significantly hard for these humans ,especially the poor people . To summarize the composition , the essay
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the advantages of growing the products to decrease the overweight, not only but it
also
shed light on it is the disadvantages . Regarding
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with
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • fattening foods
  • calorie-dense
  • healthier food choices
  • taxation
  • economic implications
  • social implications
  • subsidies
  • nutritional education
  • public health campaigns
  • nanny state
  • individual's right
  • consumer behavior
  • preventative measures
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