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Main Topic: Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because children can get so much information available through the Internet while others believe that nothing can replace physical classrooms with direct guidance from teachers.Discuss both views( and give your own opinion).

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Nowadays, there is no doubt that the
internet
 plays a vital role in everybody's life.One can achieve a large amount of information from the
internet
. Some believe that there is no need for
school
 these days because
students
 can learn everything from the
internet
. Others and I believe that physical interaction with teachers and
school
 is most important. On the one hand, people believe that there is so much information available on the
internet
 that a scholar can get. It saves admission fees, monthly fees, and charges for uniforms and books. It
also
 saves time to commute to
school
.
On the other hand
, I highly recommended that schools are the best way to learn.
Students
 attract their teachers and make many friends. It makes a child extrovert. There are
also
 some sports activities in
school
 which help a scholar to become a good sportsman. In online learning, there are videos on the
internet
 that a student has to play. Most
students
 do not like to study on the
internet
.
Moreover
, more use of computers or laptops results in eyesight weak.
For instance
, a survey conducted by Harvard University found that 80%. The student who learns offline or visits the
school
 is more socialised and passes their examination with good grades as compared to other
students
 who learn online. To conclude, in my opinion,
students
 should go to
school
 to learn. They become more socialised, and extroverted and
also
 participate in sports which is
also
 good for their health.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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