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Some people believe that, professional, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training, others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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 days many schools of thought acknowledged that professional bodies should be united and encouraged to
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 that
professionals
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 to show
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 skills by working in other
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 barriers
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 to be able to
work
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the institution to experience different skills and
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 of doing things to promote positive when carrying out different practices.
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 a surgeon who trained at Net Barnes University in the United Kingdom,
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 to Korea to
work
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 in a hospital and performed a surgery that was meant to
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 in the hospital.
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professional
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 should be encouraged and free to
practice
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other country
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.
Furthermore
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 of not allowing people who
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 in a particular profession to
work
 in another country that they are not trained in can not be
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over looked
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 or neglected.
This
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opinion
 may not be of great effect because they have so many barriers that may affect them when working in other
countries
such
 as communication, racism and
culture
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 of those people they are meant to
work
 for.
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 a Christian going to
work
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 an Arabic native. Considering the religion of the nation,
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could affect the ability of the individual to carry out his
work
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 environment. In regards to the
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 it is still in my
opinion
 that
professionals
 from other
countries
 are free to
practice
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countries
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they
 are not trained. To sum it up, allowing
professionals
 to
work
 in other
countries
 where they are not trained freely. Is of great impact on the individual and country, it promotes
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 of different skills and methods in
practice
. But it can be affected
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 barriers
such
 as communication, religion and others. I am still of the
opinion
 that
professionals
 from other
countries
 should be allowed freely to
work
 in other
countries
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • skilled workforce
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  • ethical obligations
  • labor market
  • cross-cultural competencies
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