Life nowadays is generally much more stressful than in the past. Give some reasons why people suffer more from stress nowadays, and say what they can do to reduce it.

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These days, anxiety has increased in
people
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more than a few decades ago.
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is because the desire
of bringing
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materialistic things has increased.
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a luxurious lifestyle,
people
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put so much pressure on
them
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themselves
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for earning
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money. The situation can be improved by achieving a work-life balance. The first reason for having
stressful
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life is
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an individuals’
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individuals’
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high expectations. To fulfil these goals, one creates an imbalance between their work and free
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.
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,
people
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prefer to do overtime in the workplace
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money or
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instalments for their cars or houses
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of having some
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for themselves or their family
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of the day.
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circle of earning money without enough
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and relaxation becomes the cause of anxiety.
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, a sedentary lifestyle
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promotes mental and physical health problems. To illustrate, the young generation spends most of their
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in front of screens and they do not socialise much in the actual world.
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, having virtual relationships
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stress
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them
due to
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fake views and trolling. 
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, one needs to adopt work-life balance and social relations in the physical world.
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could
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by giving equal importance to personal and professional life.
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, after completing appropriate working hours,
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must put down their burdens of work with spend quality
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alone or with family.
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, for re-energising one’s mind and body, free
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is vital and it
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serves as continuous motivation to work in future without compulsion.
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, young
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should spend less
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on online social media or games. They must share their ideas and emotions with their near ones because it is the best way to relieve stress. In conclusion, working continuously
for
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fulfilling
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dreams without enough rest
cause
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trouble in life and
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problem
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by the
excess
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usage of social media
platform
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by individuals. To overcome
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issue, balance is necessary between job and personal
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including being close to loved ones
besides
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virtual friends.
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