IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

In some countries, people who commit less serious crimes are made to undertake community service* instead of a prison sentence. Some people believe that all people who have committed a crime should be sent to prison. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #people #crimes #community #service* #prison #sentence #crime
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is common that in most countries that the government has the law of not sentencing association to prison,
instead
Linking Words
 work in on community
service
Use synonyms
 in the
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
 for the community who committed a minor felony, and
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
 strongly suggest
this
Linking Words
 is the best move and I will support my statement in the paragraphs below in
this
Linking Words
 world crime has become a very common occurrence in all the cities in the world, varying in the severity of the crime from a very serious charge to a minor charge and it is ideal to have the community who commit small crimes be instructed to work in association
service
Use synonyms
 will be really beneficial for the
convict
Use synonyms
. As he
works
Use synonyms
 in
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
service
Use synonyms
 in his
locality
Use synonyms
 he gets to meet a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
people
Use synonyms
 and get an
opportunity
Use synonyms
 to know the
nation
Use synonyms
 living around the
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
 and help him socialize with
people
Use synonyms
,
this
Linking Words
 will greatly help the
convict
Use synonyms
 to
blend
Use synonyms
 in the
society
Use synonyms
 as it helps him to transform into a better
person
Use synonyms
 by working and helping other
people
Use synonyms
 As he
works
Use synonyms
 in
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
service
Use synonyms
 in his
locality
Use synonyms
 he gets to meet a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
people
Use synonyms
 and get an
opportunity
Use synonyms
 to know the
nation
Use synonyms
 living around the
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
 and help him socialize with
people
Use synonyms
,
this
Linking Words
 will greatly help the
convict
Use synonyms
 to
blend
Use synonyms
 in the
society
Use synonyms
 as it helps him to transform into a better
person
Use synonyms
 by working and helping other
people
Use synonyms
 As he
works
Use synonyms
 in
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
service
Use synonyms
 in his
locality
Use synonyms
 he gets to meet a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
people
Use synonyms
 and get an
opportunity
Use synonyms
 to know the
nation
Use synonyms
 living around the
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
 and help him socialize with
people
Use synonyms
,
this
Linking Words
 will greatly help the
convict
Use synonyms
 to
blend
Use synonyms
 in the
society
Use synonyms
 as it helps him to transform into a better
person
Use synonyms
 by working and helping other
people
Use synonyms
 As he
works
Use synonyms
 in
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
service
Use synonyms
 in his
locality
Use synonyms
 he gets to meet a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
people
Use synonyms
 and get an
opportunity
Use synonyms
 to know the
nation
Use synonyms
 living around the
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
 and help him socialize with
people
Use synonyms
,
this
Linking Words
 will greatly help the
convict
Use synonyms
 to
blend
Use synonyms
 in the
society
Use synonyms
 as it helps him to transform into a better
person
Use synonyms
 by working and helping other
people
Use synonyms
 As he
works
Use synonyms
 in
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
service
Use synonyms
 in his
locality
Use synonyms
 he gets to meet a
lot
Use synonyms
 of
people
Use synonyms
 and get an
opportunity
Use synonyms
 to know the
nation
Use synonyms
 living around the
neighbourhood
Use synonyms
 and help him socialize with
people
Use synonyms
,
this
Linking Words
 will greatly help the
convict
Use synonyms
 to
blend
Use synonyms
 in the
society
Use synonyms
 as it helps him to transform into a better
person
Use synonyms
 by working and helping other
people
Use synonyms
Submitted by bladtherf on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: