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Write about the following topic: Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Poverty
 is a global issue and the same shall be dealt
in
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 high respect. There is a community in each country who are less privileged compared to others and suffering from various
basics
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 issues.
This
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education
 and employment, and suggest authority steps to assist
to
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the weaker sections of society. With the increasing population,
poverty
 has increased a lot in recent times. The
government
 has failed to fulfil basic necessities like food, health treatment and
education
. The illiteracy rate has increased drastically and
people
 failed to receive
basic
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 skills required for livelihood.
Moreover
, due to
an
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unemployment,
people
 do not have work to earn their bread and accommodate their routine lifestyle. The latest survey carried out by Oxford University shows that 69% of the total population is living beyond the
poverty
 line in South Africa.
Government
 shall take steps to promote industrialisation to create enough job opportunities and accommodate
people
 to fulfil their basic requirements.
In addition
 to that,
education
 and vocational training can be helpful to enhance necessary skills for jobs. Recently, the
Government
 of India launched a program called "Make in India" which promotes international brands to manufacture their products in India.
Poverty
 is a burning issue across the globe. The world has to come on a common platform and help each other for immediate resolutions.
Nevertheless
, the
government
 of each country shall initiate a mass movement for providing
education
, train
people
 and bring more industries to generate millions of new jobs. I believe that jointly the issue can be resolved.
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