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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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this
report
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 I will describe a chart that shows the
number
 of
Japanese
 visitors travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 and
Australia
’s share of the
Japanese
 tourist market.
According to
 the first chart, the
number
 of
Japanese
 visitors visiting abroad has increased each year except for 1991.
Initially
, In 1985 about 5
million
tourists
 from Japan travelled and after 10 years
this
number
 got trebled approximately.
Also
 in 1985, About 2
million
Japanese
tourists
 went to
Australia
. From 1985 until 1988, The
number
 of
Japanese
 travellers in
Australia
 increased dramatically. Beginning from 2
million
tourists
 in 1985, It reached
to
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about 5
million
 in 1988. From 1989, The
number
 fell slightly, But from 1990 to 1994 the
number
 has risen.
However
, the
number
 of
Japanese
 visitors who went to
Australia
 in 1994 decreased.
finally
, The 2 charts show us the increase
of
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Japanese
tourists
 travelling to different countries
as well as
 the
number
 of
tourists
 in
Australia
in particular
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • decade
  • fluctuation
  • consistent growth
  • market share
  • peak
  • period
  • significant
  • trend
  • indicate
  • tourism industry
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