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THE MANUFACTURING PROCESS FOR MAKING SUGAR GOES THROUGH VARIOUS PROCESS BEFORE CONSUMPTION DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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THE GIVEN PICTURE DEPICTS 7 MAIN STEPS INVOLVED IN THE PRODUCTION OF
SUGAR
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 FROM THE SUGARCANE.
INITIALLY
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 ,THE SUGARCANE PLANTS ARE CULTIVATED IN FIELDS FOR 12 TO 18 MONTHS.
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 THESE ARE HARVESTED WHEN READY AND
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 PERIOD VARIES DEPENDING UPON THE VARIETY OF THE PLANT USED. TWO METHODS ARE BEING FOLLOWED IN THE COLLECTION OF CANES ,ON THE ONE HAND,
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 CAN BE COLLECTED WITH THE HELP OF MANUAL LABOURERS .
ON THE OTHER HAND
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, WITH HARVESTERS ,WHICH IS MORE SUITED FOR LARGE-SCALE CULTIVATION.LATER ON ,THESE YIELDS ARE BROUGHT TO THE CRUSHING POINT WHERE THEY ARE MADE TO GO THROUGH A SPECIALLY DESIGNED CRUSHING MACHINE TO SQUEEZE THE JUICE OUT OF THE STEMS GATHERED. AFTER
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 ,THE THICK AND CONTAMINATED SLURRY OF
SUGAR
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 WILL BE PASSED THROUGH A LIMESTONE FILTER.EVENTUALLY,
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 FILTRATE IS TRANSFERRED TO A HUGE STEEL EVAPORATOR WHERE THE JUICE WILL TRANSFORM INTO SYRUP.THE
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 STEP IS TO CENTRIFUGE THE SYRUP WHICH RESULTS IN THE SEPARATION OF
SUGAR
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 CRYSTALS FROM THE LIQUID.
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, CRYSTALS WILL BE DRIED AND LEFT FOR COOLING. OVERALL,SEVEN SERIES OF STEPS WITH PROPER TECHNIQUE ARE REQUIRED IN THE PRODUCTION OF GOOD QUALITY
SUGAR
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 FOR DAILY USAGE.
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