Crime appears to be rising in the most counties in the world, especially among people. Identify the possible causes of this trend and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

The concern of increasing offence in the world
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in midst of Olde scent become serious. The causes of
this
appear to be focused on two cases and
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of solutions
also
to be possible. Perhaps the significant factor is poverty and financial crisis in many countries provoke increasing
of
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a felony
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felony
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. It means that poor
people
may commit
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a crime
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crime
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crimes
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to earn money.
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, indigents might steal something like food or money from stores. Another origin can be family disputes that stimulate
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vice.
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, if parents did not realize
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offsprings’
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needs, They will
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friend
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with indecent guys.
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, when young
people
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lawbreaker groups, they will commit misdeeds to get their encouragement. Turning to possible solutions, an obvious step would be for governments to support jobless
people
and help them to find
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a job
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job
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.
Therefore
, they will be able to handle their financial problem.
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, if the governments help jobless
people
, they will not aspire to
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. A
second
remedy might be for families to have
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coact with their children. SO, parents can participate
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classes to learn how they should raise their children.
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, when parents have apt
behavior
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with offspring, they will encourage
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them to
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do admirable deeds. In summary, the factors of misery and family problems appear to be the main
cases
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. Support
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the poor and paying attention to family problems may be suitable remedies.
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