Crime appears to be rising in the most counties in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

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motive between parents and governments. Felony state
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surfacing in most countries, incidentally among
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. The causes of
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unemployed
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. If young people had
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is
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a
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reaction.
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market.
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means adolescent
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their mental and
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. Turning to possible,
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would start crime prevention
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education. If young people are not raised well,
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in the future.
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university, and they feel useful.
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be
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playground for
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. In fact,
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of exercise is
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society.
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with their friends. In summary, the factors of penury and unemployed and opiate appear to be
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cases. Though, support
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and education may be appropriate answers.
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