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In many countries, schools have same problems with students’ behaviours. What do you think causes of this. What solutions can you suggest

#countries #schools #students’ #behaviours
It is commonly said that schools around the world have been facing with difficulties in tackling their
students
’ problematic
behaviours
, which in turn interfere their educational process. The reasons why
children
 have
such
manners
 are countless, but family issues, peer pressure, the easy availability of internet access and violent games play a major role in
this
 case. To solve
this
 problem, parents and teachers should be cooperatively involved in maintaining disciplines and rules to cultivate good characteristics in
students
. One of the prime causes of problematic
behaviours
 in
students
 is their family backgrounds.
For example
, some
students
 are brought up in a dysfunctional family where parents are always in sporadic fights which results in
children
 imitating these
behaviours
.
Moreover
, it can lead to
students
 misbehaving in
school
.
Secondly
,
such
manners
 are often the result of other external influences
such
 as their friends, which means some
children
 are negatively influenced by their classmates when they are temporarily free from parental guidance.
Children
 might be persuaded by those naughty friends to disobey and misbehave with others.
Such
 kinds of
students
’ actions can be tacked by encouraging good
manners
 in them. Obviously, teachers and
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school
 officials are in
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 position to deal with them.
First
 of all, teachers should remove naughty pupils from the class and give extra support to them by providing mannerism lessons so that they not only can become obedient but good friends
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 peers.
Furthermore
, parents should be contacted about their misbehaviours at
school
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their family issues at the same time. By doing so they can find out what their
students
 need to be changed. In conclusion, in most nations schools are facing
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intense problems with
students
’ disruptive
behaviours
.
Nevertheless
, these problems can be solved by understanding
students
’ outside
school
 difficulties and patiently guiding them can bring appropriate
manners
 to them.
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