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Every year several languages dies out .Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opnion ?

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Every year several
languages
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 out due to several reasons in and around
the
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society and some people think
this
 is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer
languages
 in the
world
that is
 because
of
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english
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being
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is
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most
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the most
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 spoken
language
 in
united
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the united
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 states of
america
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America
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 and in some parts of
europe
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Europe
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.
Secondly
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,Secondly
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 most
of
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the people prefer
english
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English
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language
lanaguage
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language
 over any other
language
 in the
world
 as
easiest
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the easiest
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language
 to learn and speak. To some extent
i
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I
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dont
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don't
do
 agree with
this
 opinion because
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language
lanaguage
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language
 plays a vital role in
country's
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a country's
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culture
 and tradition which helps the younger generation to know much more about their forgotten
culture
.
However
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 most of the countries in the
world
 are taking necessary steps and are dedicated to
protect
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protecting
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 & preserve their
language
 for
the
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generations to come.
For
example
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,example
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 in
country
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a country
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 like
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India
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india
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,india
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 there are many
languages
 spoken and each
language
 has its unique identity in presenting
their
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its
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 grand
culture
 at the national level. Fewer
languages
such
 as french & german are spoken only in some parts of
europe
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Europe
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 but every
european
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country
 has its own
language
 script and those
languages
 are used as
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their
teir
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their
 daily part of communication.
Finally
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 all the
languages
 across the
world
 have their own importance and
also
has
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 significance in bringing forward their ideas to the
world
 platform where they can
show case
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showcase
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 their rich
culture
 of their respective
country
whcih
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which
 helps in boosting their
country
's economy and creating
opputunities
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opportunities
 to their people and all the
languages
 must have equal importance.
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  • linguistic diversity
  • cultural heritage
  • endangered languages
  • monolingual
  • multilingualism
  • globalization
  • cognitive diversity
  • preservation
  • socio-economic
  • homogenization
  • linguistic imperialism
  • vernacular
  • dialect
  • bilingual
  • cross-cultural communication
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