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At present, the media affects people’s life significantly. What impact does this have on the society? Is it a positive or a negative development?

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The effect of the media on
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people's life is much more than we think and speak
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scenario
senario
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scenario
 Electronic, Print and Social platforms are having
very
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 strong impact on
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society. Television news channels
occupies
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first
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place
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 which is
effecting
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affecting
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 people significantly. In
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 I would like to potrate some of the key developments that are taking
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 in all the above platforms mentioned. The impact of the media on
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society is that most of the channels especially in
india
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 have their own political agenda with respect to the Political Party in power.
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news paper
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newspaper
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showcase
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 their articles in
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 attractive and
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interesting
intresting
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interesting
 manner to increase their circulation. Nowadays every political
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party
paty
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party
 has its own social platform to express
their
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 views on the latest developments in the country and the decisions taken by the Government from time to time. It has a negative development on
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society as the people are getting influenced by the news on the
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television
televisions
teleivisions
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television
. In
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context
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i
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would
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would
 like to share a recent incident that has taken
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 in Rajasthan a Northern State in India where a tailor was brutally murdered at his
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workplace
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work
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place
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. The reason behind
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 a political leader from the ruling party has made some controversial comments on prophet Mohamad which had hurt the feelings of the
muslims
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Muslims
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 in the country and some
muslim
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 activists have
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threatened
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threatened
 to kill
her
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them her
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 or
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anyone
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any one
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 who supports
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 comments on their prophet. In
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regard
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i
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 would like to share some of the ideas that would
defenietly
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definitely
 improve the situation
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 worse.
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