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Some people believe that it is good to share as much as information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
 have the opinion that data related to the various fields should be shared in order to
people
 have access to it,
however
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 some
people
 including myself have the opposite point of view. Sharing academic, scientific and business
information
 can have drawbacks for both society and
people
. In the era of
technology
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people
 can access
to
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all kinds of
information
 that they want to know about
just
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with just
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by
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 one click. As much as the
information
 becomes widespread among common
people
 the problems
along with
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get
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 more and more. Finding reliable
information
 becomes difficult, and at the same
time
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 some of it can be misleading.
For instance
, someone who has a medical problem
instead
 of visiting the doctor may search on the net in order to find some solutions to his problem, and follow one of the instructions which can make his life in danger. Because he does not take care
about
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 different parts and is common
people
. Having not enough knowledge and trusting the
information
 on websites, books or other social pages can cost a lot. Opposite what is said above, others believe that some
information
 is valuable and
it
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should not be spread. They may have the opinion that it is not fair to share data that someone has bothered a lot, worked and studied to gather
it
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freely which loses its worth. Unfortunately, there are always
people
 who
misuse
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. In
other
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word
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 they may use that special kind of
information
 and put their name on it, and the right
of
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copy right
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copyright
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 and other rules become meaningless. To put
in
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 conclusion, sharing
information
 as much as possible can have disadvantageous and loses its worth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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