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Governments should spend money on railways than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#governments #money #railways #roads
It is often argued that it is more advantageous to spend cash on
railways
 than
roads
. I completely agree with
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 and think that
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 in
railways
 is much more important than
roads
.
First
 of all, I believe that
railways
 are
more
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apply
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safety
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safe
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that
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than
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roads
 cannot guarantee because usually a lot of
car
 accidents have been on the
roads
. Even if
government
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the government
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 invests money in
roads
,
car
 accidents will not stop and it could not be
safety
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safe
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 again.
For instance
, if ice covers the
roads
, human beings will not be able to drive a
car
with
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apply
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accurate, because
wheel
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the wheel
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 of
car
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the car
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 may be glided on the ice.
That is
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the way
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why
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way
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why
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 it is more significant to choose
spending
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to spend
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 money on
railways
 than to invest only
in
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inroads
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roads
.
Secondly
, there might not be
traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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jams
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 that can be
like
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apply
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a waste of
time
.
In other words
, there is a high chance
to
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of
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 not
stay
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staying
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 in
traffic
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a traffic
the traffic
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jam
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jams
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 that individuals often encounter and it could cost
time
 to stuck
into
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in
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traffic
 jams .
Furthermore
, if citizens do not have a stopper, lateing will not be a huge problem for citizens.
For example
, a lot of human beings are being late not because of sleeping
to
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too
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 much but, because of
traffic
jam
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jams
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.
Thus
, the advantages of
railways
 that keep you safe and economy
time
 outweigh the drawback of spending money on
railways
 To conclude, I strongly believe that
railways
 are more beneficial than
roads
 because it makes society safety and not spend more
time
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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