29 . Describe a custom from your countries that you would like people from other countries to adapt. Explain your choice using special reasons and example.

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Indonesians are well-known for
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friendliness towards strangers. I would like to describe more about
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custom in our
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and the reasons why I think it is important for other
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to adapt. Most
foreigners
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when they come to
Indonesia
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they feel welcomed because people are smiling
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them and they get involved in small chats about the weather, culinary spots that are currently trending or just being asked where they come from.
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custom is one of the things that I am most proud of in my country. Coming to
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and vacationing here should not be too much of a worry for
foreigners
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as we are always happy to help in any situation.
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barrier might hinder us from communicating with
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however
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it does not stop us from smiling and being polite to strangers in the streets. Compared to other
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, mainly in the Western part of the
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world
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as
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States of America and European
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,
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is not an
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thing. Western are more individualistic compared to Southeast Asians.
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could be beneficial for some
occassions
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occasions
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studying,
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when we are faced with situations that could potentially
endager
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endanger
or threaten us
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as road accident, we should get help immediately.
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will not happen in
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filled with individualistic people,
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in
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Indonesia
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,Indonesia
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everyone is willing to help the victims of road
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without hesitation. In conclusion, I personally think that Indonesians' friendliness and communalism are the customs that made my country different from others as we are not hesitant to help strangers in the streets when we see them in need of help.
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, these customs should be taken into consideration for
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especially when they are travelling to
Indonesia
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