Write about the following topic: In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In my opinion
peoples
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people
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with weight big is problems because peoples
have
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weight big make heart
disease
. In the
word
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world
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heart
disease
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is cause
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cause
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foods
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which
are have
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bad fat. And all
peoples
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people
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lazy
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are lazy
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to do exercise like fitness and running. Impact
for
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this
experience
to
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get enough exercise
have
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ideal
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body and get better healthy especially
mature
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. Junk foods make a
disease
like heart, diabetes and weight gain body. In the contrast, have getting exercise and do not
forget
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eat
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healthy
healty
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healthy
food.
Such
as vegetables and fruit
it
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decrease
disease
health. Due to, in body healthy get soul strength.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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