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Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers. What are some problems associated with reliance on computer and what are some of the possible solutions

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Scope reliant on computers
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 associated Possible solutions The consequent modernisation of learning has resulted in the
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 of computers in learning.
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 has resulted in students relying more on them.
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 essay will highlight the
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 which are associated with that and the
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 of other resources in learning.
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 with, the
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 of computers for educational purposes has resulted in students not being able to
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 their own skills to solve
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. Being able to utilise
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's cognitive skills helps
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 to become apt at problem-solving.
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, relying on gadgets for learning
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 as laptops is detrimental in the long run.
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, when I was at school, solving mathematical
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 was done without calculators. I believe due to
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, I am able to cope better when faced with stressful situations which require human skills. The above shows the disadvantage of technology for learning.
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 of it just being a modern classroom, teachers should encourage them to
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 old-fashioned libraries for research. Back in the day,
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 being able to read a book opened up the imagination, something that technological advancement has taken away.
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 the is a need to facilitate old-fashioned books in the school system.
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 is
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 of many solutions. Henceforth, it is true that technology is taking over the classroom, so there is a need to curb
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 by re-introducing the library system.
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