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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant areas of city and towns, while others say housing facilities should be built instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is said that planting
trees
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 is an important activity for our habitat.
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, numerous humans agree that
trees
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 should be planted in the vacant
areas
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 of cities and towns,
while
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 others say housing amenities should be built alternatively. In my experience, I prefer planting
trees
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 because of some pros and cons.
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Building housing amenities will increase living
areas
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 and help residents' lives
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become more convenient. Our country still lacks accommodation for low-income workers, and even immediate ones still don't have an estate in some huge cities
such
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 as Ho Chi Minh, Ha Noi, or Da Nang. In 2021, Ho Chi Minh
city
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, which is named after my country's first President, had over 13 billion residents. Not only half of its residents
had
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 private accommodation, but the city
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 lacks educational and medical facilities.
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, planting
trees
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 will help to increase the quality of the atmosphere, protect the environment, and regulate the weather. In recent years,
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 the national and international governments
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 many laws to protect our planet, there
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has been
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 an upward trend in the deforestation issue. Because of the benefits of forests
such
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 as lumber, and land for agriculture, numerous humans try to break the law and damage the forest. To protect our planet, preventing deforestation is not enough, so planting
tree
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 in many
areas
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 is another way. In conclusion, despite many pros of building housing amenities, we should plant more
trees
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 in the vacant
areas
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 of cities and towns because the most important target of our generation is to protect our planet.

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples and details to strengthen your arguments, especially in highlighting the benefits of trees in urban areas....
task achievement
Ensure each main point is consistently supported with concrete examples. This will give further strength to your argument.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the coherence of your essay by using more linking words and phrases to connect your ideas smoothly between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are both present and effectively frame the discussion on the topic.
task achievement
You provide balanced views on both sides of the argument, showing a mature understanding of the topic.
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