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More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is positive or negative?

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Having an opportunity to
work
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 at home is now becoming significantly common for workers as employers are providing them with
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 kind of freedom. While there are several drawbacks to organizations which offer remote jobs, I would argue that
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 prevalent movement usually offers more advantages. The main reason why working online
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 the office job is a positive trend is that employees are able to organize their timetables which are more flexible than that of
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the traditional
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 working system.
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, they can engage in social activities
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day
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 and do their job at night.
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, they can continue their jobs without missing any real-life experience. Take developers as an example and we can witness
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 fact that they are all working at home due to the pandemic for the
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 being and they are allowed to
work
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 at any
time
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 they want but they should complete their assignments on the
day
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 given.
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, online
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create
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 a new chance for those who study and
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 simultaneously. With distance working on the internet, people around the world will have more opportunities to
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 for many prestigious companies in
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industrialized nations.
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,
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the traditional
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 working system might be outdated in the age of fast-growing development of technology. The
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 disadvantage is that skilled workers cannot allocate their
time
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 correctly to
work
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 and it is inconvenient and uncomfortable to be truly independent of a fixed timetable every
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.
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, the traditional method of working, which is going to
work
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 every
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, is inefficient in terms of finance.
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, companies have to pay a considerable amount of money in designing modern constructions, where the staff works, in place of making their staffs
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 at home. Another drawback is that some employees have to spend much
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 checking errors on the computer without any pauses in companies
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 of allocating some
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 to relax their eyes.
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, online working is
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 method in the working world. In conclusion, the progress of working each job online is considered
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 positive phenomenon and it will play a crucial role in the prosperity of
modern
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the modern
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 working system
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