People are surrounded by advertising, which has an increasing effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effects of this outweigh the negative effects?

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this
consumerist world, advertisement
become
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an indispensable part
for
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humans that surrounds them through its attractive products which ultimately affect
an
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individuals
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lives
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. I strongly believe that
a
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positive
consequences
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of
this
phenomenon
is definitely outweigh
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the negative effects. On the one hand, adverts become a part of modern society and it has merits too.
First
of all, it
provide
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various choices to
people
which might not possible without ads.
Also
, it opens the door for many unemployed
people
, so that they could achieve their dreams
as a result
.
For instance
, In
the
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developed countries many companies
has
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advertised
their
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certain products which
benefits
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to
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jobless
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person.
Thus
, it is the most crucial part for every citizen.
On the other hand
, attractive banners generate drawbacks too. It manipulates
people
through its glamorous posters which
attracts
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people
towards
it
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to buy that product.
In addition
, it
also
influence
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teenagers in a massive amount through
an innovative designs
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an innovative design
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such
as cartoons and stickers which persuade them to purchase
it
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them
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.
Also
,
this
put
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a huge pressure on parents from their children to buy
latest
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item which is available in the supermarket
as a result
. In conclusion, there are many disadvantages of advertisement in
the
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society, but the positive effects
such
as availability of choices and employment
are
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far outweigh
than
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its demerits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • purchasing decisions
  • impulsive buying
  • materialism
  • economic growth
  • competition and innovation
  • personal finances
  • information dissemination
  • misleading information
  • cultural norms
  • societal values
  • diversity
  • social causes
  • stereotypes
  • unrealistic standards
  • psychological effects
  • mental fatigue
  • stress
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