Some people believe that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others think that this has little effects and measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fitness plays a vital role in our life.
Although
, the busy schedule of the public is
being
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an obstruction to
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a
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leisure time to do any physical
activities
. I
concuer
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conquer
concur
that enhancing games facilities will be a positive trait for
imporving
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improving
the health of an individual. A number of sports
clubes
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clubs
have
established
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now which have a nexus of
aminities
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amenities
including, lawn tennis and swimming and so on.
On the other hand
, there are
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to
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it by keeping in mind the age and health status of the people.
To begin
with, a gradual increase in
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daily living
activities
will be of help.
Such
as, a female who is a house maker
atleast
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at least
completes 5000-10,000 steps a day . Sports
activities
mostly
involves
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those games which
leads
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to more body movement.
Thus
, if
on
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a
day to day
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life gardening is done it will not only meet the requirement but
also
be an addition
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a hobby.
On the contrary
, there are many people who will not be able to adhere
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facilities due to either lack of economy or
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schedule.
For instance
, the
one
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who
are
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living in rural areas or those working in
health
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sector or industrial sector. It is evident that a job from 9 AM to 5 PM is very exhausting and no one literally will desire to do any sort of activity after that.
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,
a
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way more has to be done . It can be concluded that
,
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a plexus number of steps have to be taken to
impore
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improve
impose
a community fitness level. Henceforth, physical
activities
aids
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in nourishing
life style
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lifestyle
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of a society.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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