Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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automation as "the binding agent" for
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humans whereas others witness it as a way to separate them from each other.
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computerization has bonded
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people
together, in my opinion, some of its daunting features
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lives apart. On the
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technology does play
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vital role in communication
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because
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many benefits.
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communication thereby bringing the world to
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limitation has disappeared successfully.
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users to remain connected 24 x 7. Eventually, there is a sense of belongingness.
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, professionals are able to conduct their conference calls online without travelling physically to remote or foreign areas.
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and expansion of their business.
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of Skype users
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increasing day by day.
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telecommunication and applied science has actually distanced
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humans from
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lack of physical touch involved in the conveyance, and I agree
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body language that plays a pivotal role during
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interpersonal skills and fail as a team player. To give an example, there are so many suicides being attempted by not only celebrities but
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man. Another issue is,
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a false identity is
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on social media. That makes others
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be envious of you and gives birth to mental disorders.
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exchange
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minimum. In conclusion, many
people
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assert that it actually destroys the cohort. In my opinion, though recent electronics
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been a boon for
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people
to remain connected,
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it has
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separated human lives from each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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