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across two years, for individuals with less than 50 in 1990 and 65 in 2010 relationship between percentage of giving money to charities and their ages was directly, but for both in begger ages the relationships were inversely.

The bar chart shows the percentages of British persons donating to
charities
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 by paying money in the range of 18 to more than 65
years
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 old, in the
years
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 1990 and 2010. In 1990, for people aged 18 to 50
years
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 old, the percentage of donations and their
ages
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 had a direct relationship, and the most significant
number
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 belonged to those who were excited in the range of 36 - 50 at above 40%.
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,
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 relationship was inverse for individuals up to 50
years
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 old.
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, the smallest
number
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 registered for the 18-25 age group by nearly 12%.
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, in 2010, the proportion of persons who gave money to
charities
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 directly related to
ages
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, except those up to 65
years
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 old. The most significant
number
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 was for the 51-65 age group at little under 40%, and the smallest figure belonged to the 18-25 age group is 7%.
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 these, in 1990, for less than 50
years
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 old,
number
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 in average almost 10% bigger than in 2010.
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, in 2010, for up to 50
years
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 old, on average, around 5% more than 1990 people donated to
charities
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. Overall, across two
years
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, for individuals less than 50 in 1990 and 65 in 2010 relationship between the percentage of giving money to
charities
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 and their
ages
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 was directly, but for both of bigger
ages
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, the relationships were inverse.

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