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Planting trees is very important for the environment. Some people say trees should be planted in the vacant areas of city and towns, while others say housing facilities should be built instead. Do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a controversy about whether the vacant areas of
cities
 and towns should be left for
trees
 or other housing facilities. I think planting
trees
 is of utmost importance, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost.
Trees
 can absorb co2 and release oxygen. Take
cities
 as an example. As we know,
cities
 are constantly populous; they have all sorts of vehicles and factories which produce countless carbon dioxide every day.
As a result
 of snorting a large amount of carbon dioxide daily, the residents will suffer from some illnesses,
such
 as headaches and high blood pressure. At
this
 point,
trees
 can alleviate the situation to a large extent.
Trees
 can absorb carbon dioxide through photosynthesis and generate oxygen. Thanks to the contribution of
trees
, we can live in a relatively healthy environment.
Second
,
trees
 can adjust the temperature in the
cities
. It's commonplace that
cities
 are repleted with skyscrapers, which are covered with glasses. In summer, those glasses absorb the sunlight and reflect it to somewhere in the city. As a consequence, it is easy to raise the temperature in
cities
 and cause fires.
On the contrary
,
trees
 can block the sunlight and evaporate the water vapours
which
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 they absorb from the roots to decrease the temperature.
Third
,
trees
 can lessen the sound noise in the
cities
. Due to the global population increase, more people tend to live in
cities
. As a by-product, the number of vehicles and factories will rise, and the city will become extremely noisy. At
this
 point,
trees
 can use their leaves and underfur to dampen the sound. In conclusion, I think it's necessary to have some
trees
 in
cities
.
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