Your friend recently moved to the same town you live in. Please write a letter to invite your friend to go to the gym together. In your letter describe • Why do you go to this gym? • Say what part of this gym you recommend. • Explain why you think it is suitable for your friend.

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Dear Mina, What’s up? I hope things are all fine with you. I'm glad to hear that you have moved to Shiraz. I’m writing to invite you to Pardisan gym which is not far from your new house. I joined

this

centre three years ago and I choose it for two main reasons.

First

of all, it has very experienced trainers which help me to fit in shape. You know, they have given me an exercise schedule and have checked my progress in each section. So, l think I didn’t waste my time and money.

Secondly

, because of the low number of trainees in each group, I can have better practice and my coach can fix my problems. I suggested you attend

yoga

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class which is very helpful for you and I’m sure you’ll love it.

Moreover

, you can meditate at the end of each session which can help you better concentrate on studying. Please get back to me ASAP. Bests, Mehrnoosh

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Lexical resource: 8.0

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