We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
Nowadays,
computers
are getting much more popular, so that
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apply
people
can not live without them. It can be thought that adults are using computers
more than children, but it is not the truth. Correct your spelling
Unfortunately
Unfortunatly
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Unfortunately
people
are getting addicted to technology and it is not as good.
Firstly
, using Add an article
the computer
a computer
computer
a lot affects Fix the agreement mistake
computers
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teenagers
teenegars
and children in a bad way, because when they need Correct your spelling
teenagers
an information
they can get it from Remove the article
information
a piece of information
internet
quickly rather than using their Add an article
the internet
mind
. Due to not using their mind, they can not be creative. Fix the agreement mistake
minds
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that, it has Replace the word
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also
effect
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an effect
to
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on
people
's social life. For example
, if someone addicted
to Add a missing verb
is addicted
computer
, it is hard to have friends. Researchers say thatCorrect article usage
a computer
,
these kinds of Remove the comma
apply
people
can not communicate with other people
easily. Therefore
, they do not have a social life.
In addition
, the internet and social media is
getting dangerous place because Change the verb form
are
of
technology is developing. Change preposition
apply
People
have to carry out how much time they spend on Add an article
the computer
a computer
computer
. Especially, parents should delimit to Fix the agreement mistake
computers
computers
, so that children can not search everything
they want. Change preposition
for everything
Computers
are not always dangerous or bad to use
. It has also
beneficial
part, but Correct article usage
a beneficial
people
have to know how to use
it.
In conclusion, if people
use
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a computer
computer
for beneficial Fix the agreement mistake
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informations
it is good to Change the wording
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pieces of information
use
. But, it has to be limited because not to get addicted.Submitted by ayseggultekin on
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