Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some
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finance
athletic
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as a way to make awareness of themselves. Some individuals think it is good, while others think there
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negative
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to
this
.
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essay will demonstrate the positive and the negative effect. Games are
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of fun, relaxation and exercise. It is one of the
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that
help
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in connecting humans from different countries,
race
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,
tribe
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,
colour
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and
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together. It has
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to build
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a relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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,
friendship
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, business development, employment and
also
marriage among people. Brands
uses
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the
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large
number of
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audience pulled by sport to advertise their
product
by sponsoring them and in return, the organizers of the game will create an awareness of the
product
of their sponsors to the world.
For example
, Emirate airway sponsor Arsenal, which is a football club in England. In return, they wear a jersey with the inscription of the name of the establishment that
sponsor
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their club.
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Further more
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, companies sign some
athlete
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with a huge fan base as their brand ambassador,
this
way the signee will become the face of their brand and will represent them anywhere. Looking at the negative aspect of
this
, an organization can get into a great
lost
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if the sport they sponsor or person is not performing as they expected or refused to recognize themselves with the
product
that they
or
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produce.
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, a well
know
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footballer
cristiano
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Ronaldo during an interview moved the drink that was on the interview table away, he said water is
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best. During that period
their
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was a decrease in the sale of that
product
. To conclude, I
in
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the support of brands funding sports because
that is
one of the
way
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to have access to both local and international
audience
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.

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