Many people believe that education and high qualification will bring success. Others think that it is not required to achieve success in life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education
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is critical. Everything that exists in
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world can be learned. Educating ourselves is mandatory, despite there
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people who do not have the same chance for experiencing formal
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as in
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school.
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, school is not the only
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platform that can aid you to achieve your goals. There is an enormous
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lessons
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able to be accessed without committing formal
education
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. Formal and informal
education
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,
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has the same position currently. The sophisticated thing can
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by using appropriate tools, and for running
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this
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tools there should be
spesific
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specific
skills ease for
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usage. Nowadays there
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huge
course
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courses
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that
provide
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incredible
methode
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method
to boost your
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ability
abilty
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and unleash
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potential of yourself, and the
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thing
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can be learned whenever and wherever you are. The meaning of success for every person is different. we cannot define it without perceiving what they have
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done for their lives
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until
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until
they have had fairly. So
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occasion, I assume that
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success
can be achieved even if you are not good at school as long as you still require to learn and keep improving yourself.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • structured knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • specialized training
  • access to better job opportunities
  • higher income potential
  • network with influential peers and mentors
  • intrinsic motivation
  • practical experience
  • personal talents
  • stifle creativity
  • entrepreneurial spirit
  • formal education
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