Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?
These days, many processed foods and drinks are created with sugar and
this
leads to many health issues. I completely agree with this
statement, to reduce the impact, sugar-packed products
should be sell
at a higher Change the verb form
be sold
be selling
price
.
To begin
with, it is natural for people
to choose their cuisines based on price
, but for
some Change preposition
in
cases
they should Add a comma
,cases
aware
of how much they eat. The low Add a missing verb
be aware
price
of sugary foods and drinks may be one factor that many people
overconsume. For example
, in Indonesia, the price
of a can soda
is only under Rp7.000 or equivalent to 0,5 Change preposition
of soda
dollar
. Fix the agreement mistake
dollars
As a result
, people
tend to have two or even five bottles in one day. If government implement high-calories
goods tax policy, it could be effective to prevent obesity for young Correct article usage
a high-calories
people
since these groups are high
consumer of low-Add an article
a high
the high
price
sweetened beverages.
Moreover
, making high-sugar products
more expensive can be health
campaign to choose food wisely. Correct article usage
a health
This
is because the prices of products
increase to some level which people
cannot afford, they may change to foodstuff that are
high in minerals in their bodies. Change the verb form
is
For instance
, a box of chocolate cookies or biscuits tariff only two times the cost of low-calories crackers, it would be great to choose which have same
amount to satisfy Change the article
the same
in
Change preposition
during
the
snack time. The low sugar goods Correct article usage
apply
much
healthier Add a missing verb
are much
since
Change preposition
than
its
natural ingredients.
In conclusion, high-sugar beverages should be made more expensive to reduce sugar consumption. With some government regulation and company awareness, it will thrive Correct pronoun usage
their
people
to select high vitamins and minerals products
. Furthermore
, as said by an old friend, over-consume a thing has bad impacts.Submitted by damaspandya on
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