Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, many processed foods and drinks are created with sugar and
this
leads to many health issues. I completely agree with
this
statement, to reduce the impact, sugar-packed
products
should
be sell
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at a higher
price
.
To begin
with, it is natural for
people
to choose their cuisines based on
price
, but
for
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some
cases
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they should
aware
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of how much they eat. The low
price
of sugary foods and drinks may be one factor that many
people
overconsume.
For example
, in Indonesia, the
price
of a can
soda
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is only under Rp7.000 or equivalent to 0,5
dollar
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.
As a result
,
people
tend to have two or even five bottles in one day. If government implement
high-calories
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goods tax policy, it could be effective to prevent obesity for young
people
since these groups are
high
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consumer of low-
price
sweetened beverages.
Moreover
, making high-sugar
products
more expensive can be
health
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campaign to choose food wisely.
This
is because the prices of
products
increase to some level which
people
cannot afford, they may change to foodstuff that
are
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high in minerals in their bodies.
For instance
, a box of chocolate cookies or biscuits tariff only two times the cost of low-calories crackers, it would be great to choose which have
same
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amount to satisfy
in
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the
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snack time. The low sugar goods
much
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healthier
since
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its
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natural ingredients. In conclusion, high-sugar beverages should be made more expensive to reduce sugar consumption. With some government regulation and company awareness, it will thrive
people
to select high vitamins and minerals
products
.
Furthermore
, as said by an old friend, over-consume a thing has bad impacts.
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