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It is much more convenient to watch a movie on television or computer than buy a ticket and go to the cinema. In the nearest future the popularity of cinemas will drastically decline. Do you agree or disagree?

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people
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 to watch
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a movie
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movie
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 without going to
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the theater
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in
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nowadays. In
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less than before in the future from our lives. As far as I am concerned,
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 still have some advantages of
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 exist. Cinema can provide lots of
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 when
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 seating in the
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theater
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 and see a
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. Sometimes
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 are enjoying the atmosphere of the
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 which
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 with full of audience. Not only
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’s emotion but
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 who seat in the same place can give different affect.
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, laughing or screaming sounds from other audiences helped
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 to have more fun during playing the movies. And some
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 just like the high technological facilities of the
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 and the popcorn made from the front desk.
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, with the rapid development of the applications and software, more and more resources from the website provide
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different
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instead
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 of going to
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theater
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. A cost of
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membership
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to
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 website almost
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 to the ticket
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to
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 in the cinema.
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 have more willingness to pay for the members of media platforms, the reason
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 the habitat of
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. Some
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also
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home
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the home
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 is safety
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then
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criminal. In conclusion,
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movie
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a movie
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theater
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which
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is a popular entertainment
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 for everyone. But some reasons lead the
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 of cinemas
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 generally, it is obviously
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 now and I think it will become more closed
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 in the future.

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