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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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The level of application of modern technology and techniques has never been on
such
 a level playing field as it is
today
.
However
,
this
 does not mean we have eradicated hunger, in fact,
on the contrary
,
considerable
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a considerable
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 number of people are still suffering from lack of
food
, if not
absence
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the absence
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 of it. I think
this
 is because of
mal-distribution
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the mal-distribution
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 of the
resources
 and corrupted governments, and there are two measures that can be taken to tackle the problem. To start off, the primary reason why hunger still exists is corruption
that
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which
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 is rather prevalent in most governments
today
. It is because of
this
 moral illness,
key
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 authorities attempt to make money
of
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from
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 or take unfair political advantage of
food
 by either selling at high prices or blocking
food
 sales to have their terms accepted. It is no secret
today
,
because
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 of the mounting violence of war in Ukraine and blockage of sales of wheat, global prices thereof hiked up. Sadly, corrupt
leaders
 are so many
today
, and some of them heading poverty-stricken countries, sell the
food
 freely granted by international organizations regarding it as a ‘get-rich-quick scheme’. Another reason
that is
 correlated with the corrupted rulers is the mal-distribution of
food
resources
. Needless to say,
resources
 at hands of selfish people will go to the hands that benefit them either politically or financially. The most viable measure
that
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apply
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is quality
education
 supported by both nations and their
leaders
.
Education
beneficial
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 in many ways ranging from nurturing GOD-fearing human beings to well-behaved politicians who realize greed is bad and sharing is good. Having been educated
good
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with good
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 qualities, potential
leaders
 will care about their nations more, and the history of mankind is full of
such
 examples –
such
 as Umar ibn Khattab, Mahatma Gandhi, Nelson Mandela and so on. Another measure to be taken is demanding
implementation
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 of full democracy, for which
education
 will play here a major role, too. Transparent policies and reporting of their practice in front of the parliament and democratic representatives will curb, if not prevent,
leaders
 from abusing their power and usurping their influence to direct the
resources
 in an unintended direction. In conclusion, as long as ruling authorities continue
misuse
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the misuse
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 of
resources
 resulting in mal-allotment, poverty will continue to exist.
However
, strong
education
 and
tough
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a tough
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 democratic society will combat
such
 problems and yield
in
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apply
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necessary reforms
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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