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You are interested in studying a short course at a college in an English speaking country. Write a letter to the college. In your letter you should say: which course you are interested in and why? describe your educational background and work experience? and say why you would like to study at that college.?

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Hi,
This
 is Amama Zubair writing to you to share my interest in one of your summer courses, as your institution is offering many training courses for the
beginers
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beginners
 who want to earn some extra money, despite
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being
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not relevant to their previous degree.
Therefore
, I am keen to learn the digital marketing course at your college as that would help
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 earn through freelancing online without affecting my chemistry career, as
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 have some free hours in the evening.
Moreover
, let me give you some information about my educational background,
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 hold a
master
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 degree in chemistry and
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 working as
chemist
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 for
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 4 years. I know my choice of beginners course is not relevant to my background but
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 love to enjoy different lines of work. I
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don't
 think studying and getting along with the stream of study will be difficult for me as
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 have advanced level
english
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 language certification, and have some knowledge about the course, gathered via
internet
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. I hope to get a
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positive
postive
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 response from your side. Regards,
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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