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Although the position of women in society today has improved, there is still a great deal of sexual discrimination. Do you agree?

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Women
's contribution to the growth of
society
 is an indispensable factor. Nowadays, their value is getting improved than in previous years, due to their skills and education.
Although
 male domination is still prevailing in various sectors of
society
, some fields are widely open and reserved for
women
. I do not agree that
society
 contains an immense deal of sexual discrimination. In the past days,
females
 do not have the freedom to get an education and speech.
For example
, Country like India
females
 is considered to take care of their family and children. They are getting married at the age of 12. But now, globally, the situation has changed and all the children have equally treated well and sex-colour discriminations are out of
society
.
Females
 are getting the selection for armed forces, government level jobs, and even in politics too they are playing tremendous positions.
However
,
females
 had to face some discrimination according to UN study reports.
Firstly
, underdeveloped societies still face female discrimination. For the upliftment of
women
 many charitable organisations are now working, by providing free education and making them stay on their own feet.
For example
, ladies from jamaica, Nigeria etc. are now selected to attend world seminars and research departments. In conclusion,
society
 needs
females
 as well as males for its development. Avoiding
women
 from the sectors of
society
 will not bring good fortune to the nations. I felt that the situations are better than in the older days and more
females
 are coming forward and contributing to the improvement of their
society
.
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