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Nowadays men’s sports are given far more attention by society compared to women’s sports. What are the reasons for that? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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Over a few decades
sports
 became more famous The interest in
society
 increased dramatically towards games ,
However
, more
support
 has been given to male
sports
 than female
sports
This
 essay shall analyze the causes of
this
 phenomenon and its effect of it on development. I, personally feel that it could have a negative effect on the growth of
society
. There are many reasons for
this
 problem.
First
 and foremost the mentality of
society
 influenced
women
 to
show
 their talent. To illustrate, people think that
women
 should only sit at home, grow their children and cook for the family Especially older people think that it would be shameful in their cast of
women
 to play games on the ground in front of others.
As a result
, more
women
 did never get many chances to
show
 their creativity
Hence
,
women
's
sports
 are less famous than men's
sports
.
Furthermore
, the infrastructure provided to
women
 to
show
 up their talent an
also
 another reason for the less popularity of
women
's
sports
. To add more to
this
, the government gives more funds to man
sports
 than
women
's
sports
for instance
 in cricket presently A grade male player's salary is almost 10L per match whereas it has less than 1L per match for
women
 To beside
this
 media and TV are not showing any news of
women
 achievements rather than they are busy in showing tiny take of any famous sportsmen.a The result of
this
 will definitely affect adversely on the nation's growth. If
women
 do not get
support
 from their
society
then
 they are never able to
show
 their creativity outside of the world. It affects
women
 themselves as well as the country's economy. There are many tournaments organised for female
sports
 too But, became of not getting proper training and
support
 from
society
women
 can't able to attend those tournaments
as a result
 of that
women
 earn less than what they should get.
This
 will eventually affect if national economic system. To recapitulate, it is reiterated that
women
's
sports
 are not getting proper
support
 to
show
 their talent which makes a negative impact on the development of the nation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionalized
  • commercialized
  • prominence
  • gender stereotypes
  • perceptions
  • visibility
  • sponsorships
  • advertising revenue
  • disparity
  • media coverage
  • inequalities
  • stereotypes
  • inclusive
  • equitable
  • traditional gender norms
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