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Discussion essay: Some people think that student's study more efficiently in groups, others argues that studying separately is better. Discuss the advantages of both ways and give your opinion.

Most people have studied in their lives, some more than others and everyone has
preference
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 the way he or she studies. There are many different techniques which
students
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 prefer,
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 as writing a summary or
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 a lot of practice questions.
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 some
students
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 think that studying in
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groups
group
 is more
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efficient
effecient
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efficient
 and others think that studying alone is better. In
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essay
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 I will discuss, which way of studying is better and why.
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 of
all
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 it depends on the situation. When you need to learn facts,
such
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 as learning words from
another languages
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 or get to know formulas from math or
phyisics
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physics
. If
this
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 is the case it is better to study alone
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 because
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 is no one who can help you remember those words or formulas, you need to do it
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own
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 your own. Some
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 in a group because it will help them stay focused and motivated. But what I experienced in High School is that it was easy for me to get distracted, when I was studying with friends.
On the other hand
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, studying in a group
also
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 has its benefits. For
me
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this
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 was especially the case when I was writing a report. Your fellow
students
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 can help you
how
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 to start writing the report and give you tips.
In addition
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 to
this
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, you can discuss with each other and
this
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 will give you an insight on how other
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students
 handled the same problem. To conclude, for me studying alone is better
,
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 because I am way more focused and
now a days
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nowadays
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 you have the internet where you can find the answers to most of your questions.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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