Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. What is your opinion? Write your response not less than 250 words.

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It is observed that many people tend to purchase the goods under the influence of publicity without realising their necessities, whereas some humans believe that marketing
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understand
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the new products as those have proved useful for improving
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life
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. Though promotion of the products might seem to have stocked unnecessary items at home, in my
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ads
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provide a fresh idea to help increase the standard of living.
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, marketing assists in
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process of an
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cycle" because it plays with the psychology. It tends to create a place for the "need" in the minds of
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is done by attracting their attention thereby simulating an interest in their head. That dabbles the
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element and
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the person is tempted to buy; mostly without much thinking about their useability
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,
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in spite
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market has surpassed
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natural fruits or homemade drinks like buttermilk long ago in terms of its sale volume.
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, the promotional publicity gives birth to peer pressure
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in today's digital world the social norms are quite active especially when it comes to young generations.
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, purchasing is easily copied due to competition and
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it is just to stay alive in a cohort.
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, the current advertisement
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, the publicity allows
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intorduce
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introduce
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in terms of not only
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tangible goods but
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an intangible ones
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as it helps expand our horizons. As we all know, announcements do help
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ideas to reach consumers in
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and an appropriate way, the introduction of a new line becomes easier at mass. To
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illustrate
illustarte
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illustrate
, Washing machines, when invented, were sold using
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promotional
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activities
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activities
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changed the way one observes the routine of washing
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clothes. Apart from
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, the social stigmas are
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campaign for controlling the abortions of
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foetus
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using
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advertisements. In conclusion, despite
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we do end up acquiring worthless things due to
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of promotional ideas, in my opinion,
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the ideas indeed give
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to heighten
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life
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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