Some people believe that international sporting events are the ideal opportunity to show the world the qualities of the hosting nation. Others believe that these events are mainly a large unjustifiable expense. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Global sporting
events
such
as
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Olympics
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olympics
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the olympics
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and world
cupt
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cup
cups
are great opportunities for the developed countries to show their pride and uplift their economy.
However
, some believe that hosting
such
events
only
cause
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causes
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unjustiable
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unjustifiable
expenses. I completely disagree with
this
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statement
statment
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statement
and
this
essay will outline the positive aspects with relevant examples.
To begin
with, hosting
of
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such
international
events
is a great way to showcase
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the countrys'
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countrys'
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country's
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culture, food,
craftmanship
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craftsmanship
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and architecture to the outside
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world
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wold
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world
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.
In addition
, investments,
alavanche
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avalanche
of business benefits and employment opportunities will grow
than
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more than
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ever.
For instance
, in 2008
Beijine
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Beijing
Olympics held by China attracted investments which helped them to sustain
economy
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the economy
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and secure
their
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its
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position in the developed countries list.
Moreover
, global sporting
events
is
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are
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vital to
improve
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the skills of local players since international players all around the world visit and
therefore
, skills and techniques are shared among the players. The winners are given international attention and
therefore
they will gain
sponserships
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sponsorships
sponsorship
from renowned companies. They will
then
work for the betterment of
the
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apply
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sports.
For example
, the
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football
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foot ball
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football
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giant Ronaldo got a hundred million dollar
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sponsorship
sponsership
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sponsorship
to play for an international team. After, he worked with teams to develop the sport. In conclusion, I believe that hosting international sporting
events
is
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important
imporatnt
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important
for a country.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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