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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. What can be done about this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Every human being requires adequate nutrition to carry out daily numerous functions,
however
, supply is not congruent to demand. Despite the advancement witnessed in
agricultural
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the agricultural
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 sector,
food
 supply is basically inadequate
to
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 some people around the globe.
This
 essay will discuss the possible solutions to
this
 present issue. To commence with, man as an entity
,
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 needs
food
 for survival,
hence
, he always makes efforts to meet these basic needs
such
 as
food
, shelter and clothing.
Consequently
, to meet man's major need which is
dietary
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,
man
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the man
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 ventured into agronomy. Advancement in cultivation has witnessed
progressive
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the progressive
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 transformation from peasant farming to modern mechanisation. These
advance
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ratio
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 should be enough to cater for mankind.
Nonetheless
, all over the world, a huge number of individuals are still in need of daily
food
. To illustrate
further
, statistics
has
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 shown in
a
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research carried out in a region of Western Africa in 2020 that 68% of the locals have not had their proper and adequate daily nutritional requirement met. To give a clear example, pictures of emaciated babies being carried by black women
is
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 often captured
on
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 the daily journals depicting hunger,
forlorn
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 and devastation. To resolve
this
 dilemma, the government must encourage research into better yields of crop plants and best breeds of animals, provide more machines to peasant farmers and most importantly, downward review in prices of
food stuff
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.
For instance
, when the cost of
food
 is reduced, an average person will be able to feed well. In conclusion, though there has been
progression
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 in agronomics,
yet
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several individuals do not feed well globally.
Hence
, to tackle
this
 menace, it is expedient
of
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 the governing bodies to bring down the prices of goods for the benefit of all
peoples
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.

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