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A lot of money is spent on repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing old buildings, that money should be spent on knocking down old buildings and building new one. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #buildings
It is considered
instead
 of repairing old
buildings
, it is better to destroy old
buildings
 and build new
ones
. I completely disagree with that because it takes a lot of time and needs more money rather than repairing.
First
, knocking down a building and building a new one takes more time than repairing.
In other words
, the process of repairing old
buildings
 is so easier and done so faster than the process of destroying old
ones
 and building new
ones
.
For example
, repairing an old building takes two weeks destroying and building a new one takes six months. Obviously, it is not logical for small projects to choose
this
 approach, and it is wasting time. Another point that should consider is that financial budget is so important in these types of projects.
As a result
, repairing
buildings
 is must cheaper than destroying and building new
ones
. In some ,countries if companies want to build new
buildings
 they do not waste their money on knocking down old
ones
. In conclusion, destroying old
buildings
 and building new
ones
instead
 of repairing old
ones
 is not logical. It is better for projects with a low budget to repair old
buildings
 or just build new
ones
 and not waste money on destroying old
buildings
.
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